Cuck Storm Replacement Comments.

 Didn't expect so many comments. It's great. Thank you all.

I feel guilty that I've only shared excerpts. I'm planning to share the first four chapers (the first one is much the same, breakfast-in-bed one from the first version) and an outline of all the rest. I've written a bunch of those, but they don't all connect up yet. 

In the meantime, because Blogger's comments are so crap - 

It’s hard to say what’s too much when you only have fragments to go by. Like you said in your earlier post, the slow burn of his cuckolding needed the mundane chapters to help build up the impact of the erotic ones. Everytime he thinks things are going back to normal, he gets hammered by his cucking. If you have enough downtime between the erotic events, I think it should be fine.

 I have two storylines that serve for downtime - his increasing success and dynamism at work and Ashley's increasing dissatisfaction with her own. As I see it, his attempts to distract himself from his reaction to Ashley cucking him make him work harder. Plus, they way this whole scenario has knocked him out of his complacency make him more of a risk-taker, which leads to good outcomes for work. But he never connects this to him becoming more attractive to Ashley, even though it is. 

It takes a while to reveal, but the rumours about Ashley in her workplace are affecting her. Her colleagues disrespect her, eventually leading to her leaving that workplace and changing her career.

I really liked the characterization of Ashley. You made it clear that she pities Dave which indicates that she does care for him. Seeing your husband reduced in status like that can’t be easy. But also, you can see her cunning. She knows that if she controls his orgasms, she controls the relationship. In this way, the nofap plot line is very logical. It makes me think that Ashley’s mother is going to play a much bigger role in our perception of the character. She and Ashley’s father got divorced at a young age, and this is an attempt to prevent that fate from ever happening to her.

I don't know if she pities him. She's intrigued by his reaction. She absolutely does love him, and she loves the way this lifestyle makes her feel, but she's concerned that if he continues to masturbate alone then their relationship will suffer. Plus, although he loves feeling slutty and Dave knowing about it, she shies away from him seeing her as she's just old-school embarrassed about someone watching her fuck. Especially as she's so submissive with Mike and she feels Dave might lose respect for her if he actually witnesses this in person. This is exacerbated by the way Mike talks about it - he's most interested in the cuck dynamic where he is essentially dominating Dave, by dominating her, and she doesn't really buy into that in the same way.

The audio at the end was a neat idea. It does seem pretty elaborate for a new cuckoldress to do. But like I said, without reading the work as a whole, it’s hard to tell if it’s too much too soon and it is an idea that I don’t see often. I’m wondering if he’s going to not go for it, but then he gets caught snooping on her laptop or something later. It would be a temptation that he can’t resist.

She wants them to do this together. Before this she's tried different ways for her and Dave to have sex in a cuckold context, short of him watching live. She wants him to jerk off over her in a way she controls. This is her latest attempt. There's video to follow in this scene. The point (for her) is for Dave to talk to her about how he feels.

From Another Anonymous user, or the same one, who can tell?

I liked this excerpt more than the one with Mike - think I have a vague disagreement about importance of Mike. Would rather see her go back to Jim, do something with Jay, and continue with Ryan and Chang stuff. Mike is great and he can be focus but I am less interested in them *dating*. That being said, I love it all, lol.

Given your photo choice, I'd love to see Ashley also open up with a sleeve tattoo or getting her tits pierced with Tamara. 100 percent agree with wanting to know more about submissive shirt. 

Oof. I'm pretty invested in Mike. I don't think we'll actually 'see' her with anyone else. That said, there's a world of imagination out there. Jim Murta is problematic for Ashley. However, Jay does feature in a fantasy session early on. (That fantasy scene in his parents house is one of the best in the originals I think).

Ryan and Chang never really did it for me, but there's that whole party with the submissive TeeShirt and Tamara to revisit. I'm writing that at the moment.

From Bermugandr

I don't think the pace is too fast. I think the previous version was maybe a bit too fast but I really liked the content in general. I wanted to see what happened next and the interactions with the friend and anther guy. To me I think an increase in pace was needed at this point. It's like the beginning of a coaster where you go slow as your pulled up to the top. I felt like at the end of the second book we where at the top of the coaster. Like at some point his internal tension has to break one way or another, no change in pace isn't realistic either. Often the first step is the hardest and things snowball from there with each step after coming faster. Either he starts accepting bit by bit that he wants to be cuckolded and a Sissy or he has to reject to all together.

I'm of the view that the originals work so well because while he thinks he wants to reject this, every action he takes is a subconscious attempt to embrace it. He sabotages himself at every turn. When he accepts it,  even bit by bit, the story is over. If he rejects it, then it turns into something different where Ashley is doing this to him over his protests.  I'm trying to keep that mental dichotomy up in Dave's head, but each ratchet makes it more and more unbelievable. 

I really liked the revaluation that she had been doing her own research and wasn't just going along with what mike told her to do. It removes a lot of his fears. I think your set up in this section could maybe be near to the front and a good jumping off point into something from your previous long story which is her own research, that outside of the games in there normal life he's still her man and husband and only his whining makes her lose any real respect for him.

Yeah. Ashley is smart. She sees through Mike's self-serving bullshit easier than Dave. She likes spending time with him and she loves fucking him, but essentially he's a friend who she could never be with as a partner. From the start, she's realised there's something slightly twisted in Mike. He's more interested in his Dominant relationship with Dave than with her. He likes fucking her, but that's mostly because it's a way to reinforce his dominance of Dave. He has no interest in being with a single woman. So of course, she's done her own research and she realises not everything is as it seems. 

She knows Dave's whining is not the full story - it's obvious he's really getting off on the whole scene. What she wants is for him is to be able to have a 'cuckold orgasm' with her. 

If you want her to continue as a loving wife, it's also key for her to tell him and him to slowly understand it's there love that makes this so good for her and makes it work at all. Like maybe on an arousal scale sex with him alone is like a 2, sex with mike alone is like a 5, she wouldn't be able to let go so much without him in the picture, but watching him masturbate to her and mikes video is like an 8 and having sex with Mike knowing that love of her life is at home unable to get pleasure and that he's thinking about how the love of his life is out with another man is like a 100. Not exactly like that and he may not full believe it at first. 

Mostly agree, except I'd reverse those last two - her ideal scene is Dave (submissively) jerking off over her after she's been completely satisfied. Imagining Dave denied and desperate while she gets fucked by Mike is cool, but she really wants to hear how she makes him feel and how, for him, she's this incredibly unattainable forbidding sexual being who's also a totally wanton slut. 

Same user? Different?  Who Knows? But, wow. You've put so much thought into this. Thank you. I'm sure it's not desreved.

So story board idea using a lot of what you already have.
1. This is before any camera's get installed and is the first video he sees.
2. She doesn't say anything just teases him with the video and her body and it doesn't take long till he's close.
4. She then pauses and it's just as she starts to give Mike a blowjob. Tells him she's never seen him this hard before nor leaking so much precum and he see's her start to masturbate. He see's an opportunity to convince her that she's what turn him on and not what she's doing. She says that's not true, that it's not just her but what she's doing to him. She then tells him Mike's not the first big cock she's sucked, he mumbles about Jim. She ignores this and say nor was Jim. But never until now was she turned on by giving a guy a blow job. It was the fact that she was giving Mike a blowjob while he, her husband and the man she loves, was at home locked up and unable to get any pleasure. That in this part he was the only thing turning her on and now he get's to see he give mike one of the best blowjobs ever because of how turned on her husband made her. He whines about this which causes her to stop masturbating and rebuke him that only his whining is causing her to lose respect for him.
5, She stops any come back by starting the video and his eye's are drawn to the screen. He tell himself he'll show her by not saying anything or masturbating. However, as if it has a mind of it's own his body takes over and he starts to masturbate and in no time he's close again.
6. Pause again. She tells him he must love being her cuck because he can't look away and masturbates so hard. After all he could just look at her and not the screen if it was really just about her. He decides to try and just not say anything but vows to himself he'll just keep looking at her.

7. However, just as it resumes he her's a slap and his eyes are immediately drawn to the screen. Distantly he hears her giggle but can't tear himself away as he's seeing his wife worship with her mouth another, larger cock while moaning after each slap. After a little bit of this he's close again and she pauses.

8. It's an effort but after a bit he's able to tear his eyes from the screen and back to her. She giggles again seeing his struggle and then starts to masturbate again. He asks her if he'd spank her would she go back to being his again. This time it's less whining and more begging or pleading which turns her on more. She explains that he couldn't as he's not that type of man. He starts to try and say something but she cut's him off. Saying she could never love or be with the type of man who could spank her or dominate her like Mike does. She know from experience loving or being with that type of man comes with more negatives than it's worth and what she's found with him is deeper than just sex after all big dicked dominate guys are a dime a dozen but a man who likes being cucked and is strong enough to let her cuck him is one in a million. She masturbating while saying this turned on by what she's doing to him but he can also see the deep love in her for him in her eyes.

9. Seeing her love for him echoed in his eyes she tells him that he can cum on her foot but he has to thank her for cucking him while he does.

10. At this point he's lost every argument pushing him further into a submission to her and his fears temporarily put to rest his true desire comes out. He thanks her profusely for cucking him while having the biggest orgasm of his life. She also has a big orgasm as she see's him cum.

11. before the come down can start she grabs his attention an tells him if he wants to see more of the video he has to lick his cum off her foot. Which he does and after finishing as he's hitting the low he see's her counting down.

12. Then you can have the after care scene you did previously. Give him the chance to stop it if he wants, he doesn't.

13.I think for timeline purposes a time skip would work well. Like they keep watching the video while masturbating and she shares what she was thinking/feeling and turned her on. Maybe the next scene is them at the end of the video with some progressions. He's not hesitating about thanking her for cucking him she's masturbating but now maybe wearing loose clothing so he just see her hands moving under her clothes. I don't think you need to show every little step and you included him masturbating with her clothed previously and I thought that was as good place for this to end up.

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  You get to the difficulty with all this in point 13. It's too much in one scene, hitting every cuck thing in one session. If we're time-skipping in and out, like a movie might do, then you can string it out but the tension gets broken with every skip. To be honest, I think you suffer from the exactly the same eat-all-the-sweeties-in-the-bag-all-at-once problem that I do.

A the end of this scene he's thanking her for cucking him and after that, there's really nowhere to go.

Back the the point by point - I don't think she can only enjoy giving blowjobs knowing that Dave is denied - I think she does like sex, it's just better for her if it's kind of slutty. 

On the whining - in what I've written this time around, she never directly rebukes him for whining - it's always Mike. In fact, for her, while nobody likes listening to whining, she knows this is a symptom of the fact that her cucking him is eating him up. If he stopped whining it might meant he was becoming indifferent or inured to it, which wouldn't be a good thing for her. What she worries about is (a) them growing apart because of the cucking - indirectly because he's masturbating alone and (b) Dave and Mike getting into open conflict over her, because of Mike needling and belittling him, which she kind of enjoys in a dommy way, but she's aware - boys will be boys - that this kind of bullying might degenerate into open conflict which she'd have to end by dumping Mike. 

On the spanking - 'I like it but not from a man I love' - agree, but I don't think she'd spell it out so openly. As an aside AprilW9 - also known as AprilWould is a GWA audio performer on reddits GoneWildAudio forum. She has a really great cuckold audio on exactly this theme - Like to the reddit post,   Link to my blogpost about it.  

In it, she says something exactly like this while her bull is spanking her. Strong reccomend.

Phew. Anyhow, like I say above, I feel like I've whetted a lot of appetites and I hope I can satisfy them. I'm reluctant to push out much more until I can get a solid set of chapters, even the first four or so, that I'm totally happy with. When I get a chance I'll map out the outlines for each chapter and the first chapters I'm okay with, which may be nearer the middle as I'm finding the beginning the hardest.

Thanks for all the comments. I'm very enthused.

Al.

 

More Cuck Storm Replacement Service.

 Blogger feels like the worst platform for this stuff. The comment system is atrocious. I think about moving to Medium, but the hassle puts me off. 

Anyway, I got some kind comments, and I wanted to post another excerpt. 

In the meantime - 

More analysis after a second read. You’ve definitely nailed the tone again and the goal of making the cuckolding more indirect to keep it inline with the books was accomplished. I also liked the story about Mike’s past. It gives more context about why he is the person he is and also plays to the “mommy” theme that was very prevalent in the first two books. It also brings to mind the “Alfie” dog story Dave tells in the first book.

The excerpt feels much more connected to the first two books and I can tell how much your analysis has helped. Your point about the main storyline is well made and I’m wondering if there even needed to be a fourth book like was initially announced. It seems like there wouldn’t be enough material unless the original author planned on creating some arbitrary drama like many of the big genre authors tend to do. The author reminds me a bit of the director Michael Bay in a way. He made some good movies but doesn’t actually understand why those movies were considered good nor how to replicate that success in his other work. Like Bay, I don’t think the original author has any idea why his first two books were successful. It’s very possible that you have a better understanding of his work then he ever did.

I don't know about tone. McManus is able to write Dave's inner monologue so well. It feels like you're inside his head. I keep going back to action and dialogue. And my stuff is so wordy. 

I'd totally forgotten about the fat kid and Alfie. That whole sequence in the beach house is so well done. Nothing actually happens but Dave works himself into a total lather in 24 hours. If I'd written that, there would have been an orgy in the hot tub in the first hour.

In my view of Mike, which I haven't really worked into the story much, he is all about domination of other men. He sees sex almost exclusively as a power trip. He doesn't want single women. he only gets off on the power of humiliating other men. There's more of this in other chapters. The childhood story is true, the key point being that he says he didn't bully the other kid, but he did. 

I doubt I have a better understanding of what makes the original two books so good. I certainly can't recreate them. He's able to paint the light and shade very well. I think the problem with the story is the same problem for all cuckold stories. The start is always the best part and after the very first scene, it's all epilogue. 

Cuckolding is a wife going with another man. Once it's happened, it's all repetition. Sure, you can spice it up, escalate it, but the vital 'Oh God, No. Why do I like this?' moment is essentially a once-off, and you're chasing that high for the rest of the book. Sequels even more so. 

All that said, here's a spicing-it-up excerpt from earlier than the other one. I've lest in my own notes and stuff at the top. [doorman] means I can't remember his name and I have to go back and fix it later. 

Another Extract

This is roughly two thirds of the way through. As you'll read, Ashley has been increasingly closing down his masturbation. She's going to a work function of Mike's as Mike's date and will be staying over at a hotel. Is this too much? This 'NoFap' storyline is the main Dave-Ashley interaction. The other main one is the Dave-Mike humiliation one where Mike increasingly engineers situations where he can humble Dave. 

The intention is that this scene flows into Ashley encouraging him to masturbate in front of her, using audio and video of her and Mike together as a lure. That still feels like too much too fast. I haven't written that bit yet, and I'm leaning toward Dave refusing to go along with it but I don't know what that does to the story. 

Input much appreciated.

If you don't want to struggle with comments, alamopreacher@gmail.com will reach me.

Cuck Storm Replacment : Attempt two

 A while ago I made an attempt to write the third book in David McManus's Reluctant Cuckold series.

I say attempt, because while I enjoyed writing it, and I got a lot of good feedback, I didn't think it was all that good and eventually it ran into the sand. I made a few attempts to 'fix' it, I never felt I was getting anywhere and I abandoned the effort.

Well, it ate away at me. I kept returning to re-read "Reluctant" and "Horizon" and appreciate them more and more. 

Here's the things I thought were wrong with my attempt, in no particular order.

• It moved way too fast. Ten chapters took place over a couple of days.
• I went straight from explicit sex scene to sex scene too rapidly.
• I didn't get enough of Dave's internal monologue and retrospection in, which is a hallmark of the originals.
• I didn't do enough fantasising. Some of the best passages in the originals take place in Dave's head.
• There's very little face-to-face time with Mike. Mike humiliating Dave directly are also really good scenes, but I shied away from these.
• Ashley and Dave get super explicit about femdom, cuckolding and FLR straight away. The glancing-off-it unstated nature of the originals is lost almost immediately.

For me, the key point in the originals come after Ashley invites Mike back and they close the door on Dave. 

When Mike says “I think we’re going to have a little private time now.” That's the point that a good book gets really very good. What makes it even better is that there's almost no explict sex that evening. They turn the music up too loud. It's all in Dave's head.

Amazingly, McManus pulls this off again in the second book. 

“Dave,” she said, “I think we’re going to retire now, okay?”

“You’re going to bed?” I said.

“Yeah, we’re going to the bedroom now, okay?” 

If anything, this is even better.  These exchanges work so well because McManus has done so much work leading up to these scenes and he's been so subtle in painting the relationship between Ashley and Dave.  

To try to get more familiar with the spirit of the originals, I did a couple of things. First, I made an index for the first two books. Here's an excerpt. I wanted to count and see where these topics came up. There's three pages of this.

I used Sarah Evaliina to illustrate.

Then I made a time-line. How much time passes between events. In the originals, future events - Ashley going out with Mike, them meeting up etc. are flagged in advance which makes the book flow better. 

And while I did those, I wrote short summaries of each chapter in the first two books.

In short, I took it all apart to see how it ticked.

During previous rewrite attempts, I'd written some passages which I liked, and now I'd written more, but they weren't linked together.  So, I tried to write some sort of structure for the book to hang them in and try to avoid the pitfalls that I'd repeatedly fallen into.

As a hobby, do-it-for-the-fun-of-it kind of writer, I never think about structure. I just sit down, start writing and see where it goes. Obviously, this is bad. All my bad habits and foibles have free reign and get amplified by this stream-of-bullshit way of writing. 

I think Hemmingway said that writing is easy. You just sit at your typewriter and bleed onto the page. In short, it's hard work, and it's painful. 

My hardest challenge in all this was keeping away from the incredible gravitational pull of Dave and Ashley talking explicitly about what's going on. Dom-female to Sub-male dialog is my catnip. But in the originals, this never happens. They glance off each other. Discussions are not explicit. Things are left unsaid. Nothing ever concludes. 

In my first attempted rewrite, I broke this rule straight away. Ashley makes Dave say that he is her cuck in chapter two. She then makes him jerk off onto her foot. And from there on, the relationship is irrevocably changed. Now, I liked writing that chapter. Readers said it was hot. But if Bruce Willis and Sybil Sheppard had got it on  in the first episode of Moonlighting, then nobody would have watched episode two.

I had to keep more of this unsaid. More meaningful silences. More talking at cross-purposes. More ambiguity.

But of course, it's hard to keep that believable, given all that's happened in the first two books.

There is an idea of fiction of rising and falling action, with each cycle getting faster and more heightened until a crisis, and then denouement. I wanted to follow this idea, which I think is present in the originals. In the originals they meet up with friends, or we hear a lot about Dave's work, or they spend time doing couple stuff together. In fact, that's two thirds of the books. It's not sex-scene to sex-scene to sex scene. I tried hard to make these parts interesting. 

I have to admit that on my first read-through of Reluctant and Horizon, I kinda fast-forwarded through all the scenes in Dave's work or the going-out-as-couples with their friends. But these scenes are essential to the tone and pacing of the book.

Also, there is an idea of a story's plot, the main storyline, and sub-plots which contrast with the main storyline and give more substance.

For me, the main storyline is Dave and Ashley's relationship. His reluctance to accept that he is a cuckold, and her grinding away at his resistance - the final crisis being his acceptance, maybe even embracing of the lifestyle.

The subplots are Mike and Dave sparring off each other, and (continuing from the original) Dave's failures and victories in his workplace.

That main storyline is hard to keep in check. When I re-read Reluctant and Horizon, it's surprising just how dominant Ashley is. Early in Horizon she makes him enter chastity, but it's all done so  carefully that it doesn't feel forced. When I wrote equivalent scenes, they felt like a slam in the face. I tried hard to work on the tone, less jump-scare, more rising dread for David.

Finally, I decided the answers to some key questions I felt I had to have clarity on. Here's a few examples.

• Does Ashley actually want him to watch?
• Why hasn't she invited him to?
• Can she be with someone else? Jim? Mike jealousy?
• The 'submissive' tee shirt party  - what happened?
• Did Ashley go to Mike’s after US Open?
• Was there someone before Murta?
• Has Tamara met Mike

I've written about as many words now as there is in either Horizon or Reluctant. But, I know I'm going to dump up to half of it, and I still have a lot of 'connective tissue' to write.

I'm still actively working on it and there's no part I'm 100% happy with.

In the meantime, here's an excerpt, a part I like and will keep in the final version to some degree.

The context for this is - it's later in the story - in the second half. Ashley has started to forbid Dave to masturbate for periods. Mike is about to go away on a business trip. Dave is determined to make the most of the Mike-free time. He's bought her a fancy lingerie set, intending to give it to her once Mike is gone but she sees the bag and he can't resist giving it to her early. Then he has to go to a bar to meet Mike and bring him back later. Ashley wants them to be friends.

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Some people have commented or emailed encouragement to work on this. Thank you all so much. It really does help to give me momentum. 

Some people suggested a tip jar or something like that. No need. To be clear, I'm never going to sell this. It's too close to the original author's work and it wouldn't be right to charge for it.

When I have a draft I feel is okay I'll make it available here for free. 

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A bad idea : Cartoon PMV

A Bad Idea : A cartoonPMV

Did something different recently. Not a PMV, more a kind of comic/cartoon story thing.

A while ago I started seeing video clips with a cartoon filter, like the one on the left. I liked these a lot, but I didn't know what had created them and I tried to get a similar effect using After Effect's cartoon filter. The results weren't good but I noodled about with making an animated cuckold cartoon. I didn't like the overall effect though and I abandoned it ... until ... I saw that the filter was from an app called prequel. 

I downloaded it onto my phone and tried it on some clips. Very, very nice. The only problem was that it's only available on phones and I could find no equivalent plugin. 

But i was so pleased with it that I started a new cuckold animated comic thing, painstakingly selecting clips. moving them to the phone, applying the filter, saving and moving them back.

But I really, really liked the effect. 

To begin with, I made pretty basic 'pages'. When I was noodling around I'd tried to animate the frames themselves and that was (a) massively fiddly and (b) confusing to read. So I kept it pretty simple.

Initially, I'd made actual pages, which flipped over, but I abandoned this too, making parts more like scenes which moved the story along.

For the (very tropey) story - man visits domme, develops cucky fantasies, admits it all to his wife, turns out she's cucking him all along - I intercut the scenes with his wife with ones with Crystal Knight - the domme. For those, there are only clips of crystal staring down the viewer, usually full-screen.

But for the scenes with Kimber, I needed more than just sex. I had to have some talky scenes and ones where she interacts more-or-less normally. That was why I'd chosen Kimber, because I had several such scenes with her. In retrospect, although Kimber is lovely, if I was doing this again I'd go with one of the stars from MyWifeIsMyPornstar, ideally one who did a HouseWife 1 on 1. Allie Haze springs to mind.

That's not to diss Kimber, who is outstanding and amazingly pretty but I found myself hunting for more scenes rather than having to re-use the couple of minutes of footage I had.

Since I'd been concentrating so hard on getting clips and moments from the stock I had, I just let the story wander along as I usually do. Scene suggests text which suggests next scene and on and on. Being able to switch between Kimber and Crystal was great as I could make the story develop without having to make everything match up. Also, variety. 

At the start I'd assumed all this would be silent, but as I moved into the sec scenes I felt it would be better to have those scenes with some kind of moaning sex from the actual scene. Which meant music for the rest. Obviously having dialog and lip movements match was impossible but I reckoned the viewer would be able to just ignore that. In any case, the text is mostly narration. But with the Crystal scenes - where she's playing a Domme, encouraging our hero to be a cuck, well, half of her stuff is exactly that. So it was too tempting to take some sections of her speech and incorporate them. I tried not to do this too directly, as I wouldn't be able to make it work for the whole story and then it would be confusing. 

But adding sound was a new burden on editing and sine I hadn't done this from the start I had to go back and fill in more. Plus. while I'd just let some low-key techno be the background, if the sound was more of a thing, now I wanted to make sections match the mood of the piece, emphasise the impact of scenes and play more of a part like a PMV. 

In truth though, the real difficulty was the text and video matching. text requires time to read before the next piece appears, and some time needs to remain to appreciate each visual element too. Ideally, these line up in a logical flow, hopefully adding impact to the text with the visuals. So I'd estimate that 50% of the editing time had been spent adjusting the timing and length of text, slowing or speeding up visuals to make them match and moving text around the screen so the viewers eye can follow it logically, but it doesn't obscure important parts of the visual. Plus, to keep some of the original comic book panel style I didn't want to just blat out screen-filling video and plonk text on it. I wanted insets and transitions which were visually interesting and added to the scene. Hours were lost fiddling with boxes and speed ramps and animation to make this work and inevitable compromises had to be made.

 

So why do it? Because for some reason, I think the comic-art effect makes the visual better somehow. It's hrd to explain, but somehow those clean lines and smooth tones make it all sexier. If I'd done exactly this with the original, non-filtered video it would look okay, but it wouldn't pop like it does. That's partly because I like these kind of cucky stories and having the text boxes and panel-style art makes it work as familiar format. Making each scene feels very satisfying and I'm really making these things just for myself. 

Back to the story. This is the kind of thing that I've landed on now. Kimber is casually cruel but there's always a possibility that she really loves our hero. She knows this is what he wants and she's happy to give it to him. She's never going to leave him. In fact, she goes to a lot of trouble to make him happy, even though that means being incredibly mean to him, cucking and humiliating him. 

His sessions with Crystal and his memories of them make it a bit fresher than the standard cuck story and being able to match text with images so exactly is kind of what makes it fun. I learned a new respect for those layout and lettering people you see in comic credits. Positioning the text so it fits well with the images is damn tricky.

To be honest, it all got a bit out of control. I was at 20 minutes duration with no denouement in sight, partly due to me going back and adding more into the earlier sections as ideas struck me and I found more suitable clips. 

I hope I didn't take too much of a cop out at the end. I've always preferred a happy-ever-after ending and I think going further would just have been more repetition. 

If I go again, I want to find sources where the star has done as many interviews as possible - need scenes of her talking to camera. Eye-to-camera sex scenes, and ideally some femdom scenes too. There's probably a few stars who've done that. AJ Applegate maybe. Or maybe Allie Haze, especially as she's got three of those MWMP videos.

The story leads inevitable to a scene with Kimber and her boyfriend where our hero gets to watch. As usual, there's places the story could go afterwards but these are never quite as satisfying as the build-up. So I just ended it there, with our hero ind of blissed out by the whole experience. I don't really see myself going back to it.

I did, however, start on a new one in the same vein with Emma Lux in the domme role (though in this case she's our hero's bitchy sister-in-law) and Eva Lovia in the wife role. Eva has loads of scenes from Naughty America and Digital playground with a several-minute long setup which can be easily adapated for the talky and normal-life scenes. Plus, she did a whole bunch of interviews which are great. Who knows if I'll finish this, but I'm four-for-four so far on Eva Lovia PMV completion so who knows.

Spoiled Brat Magazine.

I just get it for the pictures.

 

Crystal Knight. Yet More Appreciation

Crystal Knight, yet more appreciation

My usual pornstar obsession waxes and wanes. There's an initial rush of enthusiasm and euphoria. She's amazing! She's perfect! Find everything she's ever done! Then it fades, sometimes down to a confused, "What did I ever see in her?".  At least that's how it goes for me, probably evidence of my low character. 

But with some stars it's different. The obsession waxes, wanes and then waxes the fuck back up again. "OhMiGod, how did I not see that she's this good?" Over and over again. As the amazing Crystal Knight says, "Caught in the endless cycle."

I already wrote a long, rambling appreciation of Crystal back in 2021. Go read it here. In that, I tried to spell out what makes her so different and so good at her craft. 

What was missing from that piece, was a recounting of her evolution over the five years she's been releasing material. The Crystal of 2022 is very different to the Crystal of 2017 and between those dates there have been many other Crystals. Styles, looks, content, formats, tones have been added or altered. In truth, her evolution has been more like the development of a myriad of personas and styles that she adopts, perfects, and then discards as she pleases.

I have nearly 300 of her videos, a little over ten percent of the 2,863 that she currently has on IWantClips. Obviously, I've chosen ones I like, so it's not a perfectly representative sample, but I have enough, and spread over her career to date, to be able to identify the broadly different phases she's gone through. 

There's two aspects to these phases, the physical and the performative. Crystal has changed her appearance many times. Not just her hair and makeup - I think she's had surgery on her face and body more than once. She looks quite different now than when she started, although she's always been stunningly beautiful. At the same time, she's changed how she makes the videos and the content of them. Her manner changes, her vocabulary, her tone of voice. How she moves, how she sits or stands, or the backdrop where she films.

There are distinct styles she has tried out and used for a long or short time. And they don't all remain in her rotation. She prunes them. For instance, there was a particular style she used a lot in 2019, crouching in front of her long red couch, her hair in a soft wave. These are particularly mean. She favoured tight corsets or body suits and the topics include training and slavery, often with a bitchy or very mean element. She dropped the setting in 2020 and her look changed along with it. That's not to say that there are always such strong dividing lines in time. She always mixes up content and setting, outfit and look, but new styles appear in her roster, are prominent for a while and then disappear. Always different, always the same.

So these phases overlap and merge and continue. They're not sudden shifts, but from one year to the next there are styles and looks that are distinctive to that period.

[Edit: Reading back over what follows, I'm slightly uncomfortable at my commenting on her appearance, especially her weight. I'm just trying to describe how her look changes, I'm always in awe of how she looks and her weight doesn't matter. I think she looks just how she wants to look. I wouldn't dream of criticising. Also, I don't know for sure if Crystal has had surgery - apart from some work she had done on her nose in 2021, which she posted pics of. Again, it shouldn't need to be said. Her body, her life. Anyone can do anything to their own body. I'm trying to tread a fine line between describing her look, which I find fascinating, and commenting on it. Again, her body, her life.]

2015-2017 Soft, Thin and Hesitant.

I only have a couple of dozen of scenes from this period. She's clearly developing her style. It's great, but she doesn't have the adamantine confidence of later videos. Also, she's moving around a lot more in front of the camera and she hasn't perfected her outfit or makeup choice. Some videos from this time have no femdom element at all - they're really softcore stripping videos.

She's very thin and very often dark., though there's the occasional blonde period. In fact, in her earlier videos her hair colour changes more frequently than later on.

These early videos aren't so well lit as later on, but the most noticeable difference is the sound. There's always a distinct background purr and a lot of echo. She will take some time to make this better.

Early on. Crystal wears a lot of bikinis and often she's standing up. To be honest, these are not my favorites but there are occasional flashes of the brilliance that she will later hone to a fine edge.

Some time near the end of 2017 I think she has some surgery done, or she just hits a new makeup style, I really can't say, but there's a point where she starts to look different and suddenly her confidence is much higher, and after this point, it's all femdom. 

2018 Dark, Thick and Adventurous.

Who wouldn't want to be good for her?

Until October 2018, Crystal's hair is dark and she begins a series of much stronger worded videos. She's not telling you to jerk for her, she's graciously allowing you to do so. Most of her videos are shot from a  kneeling or crouching position, or she's standing, looking down at a much lower camera and she stays there. I think her body is a little heavier than most of the earlier years, though obviously she's still utterly perfect, and she begins to vary her themes and key styles more. 

Here's a good standing example from this period. 'Be a Good Cuckold For Me.' Flawless outfit - it appears in many videos. The hairstyle is also one she favours in the period as well as the foot of her four-poster bed. Also, the gravity-defying thong bikini which she wears in a bunch of other clips.

More typical is this one, 'Sports Bra Jerk Off Encouragement'. Kneeling, no background and dark makeup. This has the perfect matter of fact line. "You need to jerk, harder. And you're going to." 

That's a rare case where Crystal films in front of some sort of plain background. Most of the time she films in a recognisable room - a sitting room or a hall. You feel you're very intimately invited into her home. 

You need to jerk. Harder.

I think 2018 is the period I have most videos for, and definitely the most favorites, like the amazing 'My words can make you do anything.' For this post, I watched almost all of them again, and I think it was during this year that she moved from performing her scripts - amazingly well - to really believing them. In 'My Words ..." She says "You need this feeling. And you're going to crave it." The whole video is shot in close-up - she barely moves. Her eyes are locked on the viewer's. She speaks slowly, with authority and real tenderness. She's not merely performing, she's creating the role and inhabiting it. She is Crystal and she is literally irresistible.

My Words Can Make You Do Anything. 

2019 : Honey Tresses of Pure Evil

Mid 2019, Crystal goes through around six months of a consistent hairstyle. At times the blonde highlights are more prominent, but in the main, she seems to have found a style she likes for quite a while. Also, some time in 2019, her face changes again. I think she has something done to her cheekbones,  or again, maybe it's just a more consistent makeup style. All I know is she looks different again.  

This is the red couch period, many of the clips from this time are filmed in front of a long red couch with the lips painting in the background. On the settee, she can sit, kneel or crouch in front of it, or even lie down. My own directory from this period is a deep red from all the red couch videos, one after another. 

Peak 'Red Couch' Period. How can you say no to this face?

It's a very prolific period, where she's posting multiple clips per week and many of them are custom videos. In style, she's now favouring much harsher content. But for Crystal, most often, that means a softer tone, an even gentler voice to deliver her excruciating lines. 'In Your Head' is a great example, or the devastating 'Once a Loser, Always a Loser.'

In Your Head. And your Soul.

A personal favourite here near the tail end of 2019 is 'Extremely Hot Home Wrecking.' Not a theme I usually go for, but her performance in this one is outstanding. When she says "Make Mommy Proud" she is just perfection. Confidence and authority just emanates from her. It feels like she will melt the camera with her raw power.

Do anything to make Mommy proud.

2020 The Dark Doorway to Slavery

I think Crystal moves into a new house near the end of 2019. Some settings seem to disappear around then, or get gradually faded out. Her favourite setting is before dark curtains in front of an archway. And she's changed appearance again, back to a much slimmer figure, either through surgery or dieting I don't know, but the look change coincides with a sudden expansion in topics covered. 

Mesmerisation has never been so hypnotic.

It's around this time that she begins to do her mesmerisation, mind-fuck videos. They aren't as well developed in style as they will later become, but this is where they begin. Also, more videos are much closer to the camera. Leaning in and licking or kissing the lens in extreme close up becomes much more common and the distance between Crystal and her viewer shrinks to almost nothing. 

Fuck You.

Findom had been a common theme in all Crystal's videos to this point but during this time it becomes an element of almost every video and she begins to produce ever more explicit findom clips. Her 'If you buy this' series, which she'd started in 2019, really takes off in this time. She's now made 60 of these which are composed entirely of clips of Crystal flipping the bird and saying "fuck you" in a variety of outfits.

Worship is a euphoric release. 

But as well as all this, there's a very telling video from 2020 - 'Training your positive femdom addiction.' 

But first, an aside. I think there's  three kinds of scripts that Crystal works from. First, are the customs. Here, she has some phrases and bullet-points she's working in. Maybe a full script from a subscriber. You can tell these apart from the others, as Crystal's eyes will flick to the script every now and again. It's subtle, but when you're staring at her face, you notice. Also, there will be hints in her monologue, more laboured points, maybe a little hesitancy. And within the video there may be noticeable edit points where she's had to stop and restart. 

Then, there's the more common clips where she's written something herself. She clearly has a theme, some phrases she's going to use, and maybe even some specifics, possibly an outline script. There's less hesitancy, it all flows better, and she's way more comfortable with her performance. 

Then there's the ones where she has started filming with some idea, and she just extemporises around the theme. These are rare, but much more noticeable. No eye-flicks and no hesitation. She just lets it all fall out of her. I think, if I'm right, that these show a lot about how Crystal feels about her work. 'Training your positive femdom' is one of these. It's worthwhile quoting one passage at length.

"You're so tired of hearing “Fuck you. Pay me.” as every girl's answer, to any question you send. There's such a difference when you're with me. It's such a euphoric feeling. So much pleasure. No degrading at all, because I know that I can get in your head. And I can own, control and dominate you without having to be a bitch. 

You need to learn something subby. So many of you do. Being nice does not make you submissive. Being kind and sensual does not make me submissive in the slightest. Do you see one thing on my body that’s submissive? Do you hear one thing I say that’s submissive? No, because I'm not. I just know the secret that nobody else tells you. You don't have to be a bitch to be dominant.

In fact, being a bitch means you're trying to prove something. It means that you are trying to show the world how strong you are by saying stupid things. I don't have to do that. Now, don't get me wrong. Some of my boys love humiliation, and being degraded all day, every day. But the reason I'm so successful and the reason I do so well is because I'm not that way.

I can appeal to that fetish. I can appeal to the desire for humiliation. But 99% of Crystal’s army, prefer me, the exact same way that you do. You just didn't realize how sensual I really am until you watch these Positive Femdom videos. Then you learned it's not about calling you a loser. It’s about telling you I want you to be a good boy for me."

She says all this without a single eye-flick or hesitation. She's just spelling it all out. I've said elsewhere that I think Crystal feels different to other performers. I think this is why. She loves dominating her boys, but she shifted from being just good to being outstanding, when she began to let her own feelings show in her videos. These positive femdom videos and her most luxurious mesmerising videos feel most true to her. She looks like she's enjoying recording them. She talks about 'Her Boys' so warmly that listening feels like the warmest, softest embrace. 

Of course, maybe I'm imagining all this and Crystal is just a great performer. But I can't shake the idea that after nearly three thousand videos, she must feel something about her work and her fans. I think, in the above passage there's a hint that this is the real Crystal. 

Crystal just wants you to feel good.

2021 Her Voice Consumes Your Soul

I think, some time in 2021 Crystal gets a better recording and editing setup. Her voice is clearer and softer and the audio level is more consistent. The dark doorway is still there, and the red couch features every now and again but she's rarely standing up.

This is the period when her tone becomes even more alluring and insidious.  Breathy, slow and intimate, she leans into the camera, exuding power and confidence. "Tell me you love me." She suggests in 'Fall into Trance' and you find that it's become impossible to resist her, even if you wanted to.

It's all so slow and unhurried. The viewer finds themselves drawn into the warm, enclosing space she has created for her subjects. Her suggestions, her commands, are so compelling and arousing that you truly find yourself willing to do anything she asks. Jerk for her for hours? Beg for her strap-on? Leave your wife? Leave your job? Pay her all your money? Eat your own cum? You would be crazy not to. It truly begins to feel like a privilege to obey her.

Her real gift, I think, is that she grants the viewer - her boy - the permission to jerk off to her. She truly encourages you to sink deeper into adoring bliss for her. There's a trust, a compact. You both agree that she is magnificent, her viewer, worthless. And thus in agreement, everything is possible. You can both revel in her utter beauty and her boy's desperate longing.

It's all so languid and unhurried. Crystal has learned to use her voice, her manner and her movements to create an atmosphere and a mood that is utterly compelling. It's subtle and effortless. She's still labelling some videos 'mesmerisation' but really, it's all mesmerising. Even something as mean as 'Jerk with your tears' is delivered in a soft tone. Brutal. Cutting. But so gently delivered. When she says "Nobody wants you. Nobody wants to fuck you. You're never the bully. You're the one that gets bullied." the whiplash between the words and her whispered delivery is torture. 

But it was after I saw her 'Being normal is boring' clip that I realised just how special Crystal is. She's like a cuckoo chick planted in your mind. She's so powerful, so greedy, that you can't help but fall in love with her even as she murders everything else that you care about, just to make more room for her, her, everything for her. "Being normal sucks." She says. "Why would you want to be normal, when you could be my sub?"

Being her sub feels like such a wonderful privilege. Really, it's everyone who has yet to discover her who is deserving of pity.

This theme, that a life jerking to Crystal is patently better than any vanilla relationship, is a constant presence. In 'Stay Single For Me' she really lays it out. "I want you to get five clips which you can spend the rest of your night with. Five clips that you can date all night long." This relationship is perfect.

2022 She Towers Over Your Prostrate Form.

Since I make PMVs, how the performer fits in the lens is very important to me. Crystal's clips fall into two broad categories here, standing and non-standing. Non-standing might include crouching, kneeling, lying or anything where Crystal is not on her feet, and very often she will shift position from one position to another, especially if she's performing with a couch or a seat. 

Standing though, is standing, often with a camera lower than waist-level and while she may move forward and back, she doesn't move from standing to any other position. She's always done these standing scenes, but in 2022 she noticeably increased the number of standing clips. At the same time, her variety and range of outfits seems to have shot up, and I think these developments are related, since when she buys a new outfit, standing position may well show it off best. 

And the new year seemed to show a great many new outfits. New lingerie, new bikinis. Dresses! Velvet bodysuits and leather bustiers! Romper suits and sheer baby-dolls. Crystal has never been shy about investing in clothes but the variety and range seemed to have moved up a couple of notches.

Right now, it's harder to see the edges of her latest development, but it is so good to follow her career as she hones her abilities and her range even further. 

I follow other femdom stars who produce similar content. I'm often surprised that they get more attention and more views than Crystal's content on IWantClips or OnlyFans. I can't help but think that this is intentional. She doesn't seem to attend shows, do interviews, or put herself out there just to gain attention. Her army is a secret army. She concentrates her time on filming and producing. I've commented before that the preparation for each clip must take a lot of effort. Hair, outfit and makeup alone probably takes half a day and that's without the setup and editing and producing it onto her different platforms. 

Conclusion.

I know almost nothing about Crystal Knight, the person, and trying to get inside the head of a performer only through their performance is an exercise in folly. Doubly so, when their entire performance is based around getting inside your head. 

What I do know of her, is all good. She is hardworking, conscientious and honest. The few fellow-fans I've talked to unanimously report how professional, kind and understanding she is. 

On the few occasions I've interacted with her, I've experienced the same. She is warm and considerate. She takes infinite care over what she's delivering and does so with a smile. In short, she makes you feel like a good boy.

The way she has developed her style and her content over seven years leads me to conclude that she must enjoy doing what she does. To have produced so much and so well, makes me believe that she feels affection and respect for her boys, her Crystal army. How could she be this good at it if she didn't feel something for her fans. She understands them, perfectly. She wants to make them feel good. She wants them to be good boys for her.