Script Offer. F4M [Cuckolding] wife gives [Jerk off Instruction] to her husband. But [No touching] Encourages him to watch [FemDom] [Porn]. His needs are a chore. [Yawn]. She deserves so much better.
Jessica has sidelined her husband in the bedroom department. He's too much of a wimp and in awe of her to complain. He may also be a bit dim.
It's implied here that Jessica has informed her husband that she is having an affair with some man called Dieter and her husband has agreed to this. It seems this happened very recently
At the time she told him about it, she jerked him off. But now, Jessica doesn't want to be lumbered with taking care of hubby's needs all the time.
Notes for anyone thinking about reading it.
*sounds*
also,
*some hint at the emotion of the speaker YMMV*
/emphasis/ maybe obvious from the context.
(I always feel weird adding these as if they're instructions,
but everyone seems to do it. Read it like you want you.)
***** We join, our couple, in bed. ****
Please honey, you're awfully twitchy.
Please. I'm trying to read.
*mildly annoyed* Oh honey. You're tossing and turning. I can't concentrate. What's the matter?
Is it Dieter? You saw me lay out my good pantyhose for tomorrow. You've figured out that I'm going on a date.
*sigh* Yes. I am.
Oh honey. We talked about this. You said you were okay with it.
Stop. Stop. *closes book firmly*
*briskly, hiding her annoyance* Look. We'll talk. It's fine. I know. These ... changes .. take some adjustment. And communication. It's fine. Let's talk.
Oh. What's /that/ look?
*slightly annoyed* Oh I see. Now you have my attention, you're happy again.
And you're flicking your eyes ... down there?
*little laugh* Oh honey. That's, slightly sad. You think when we talk about this, I'm going to jerk you off?
No. No. We need to /communicate/. You don't concentrate when I do that.
I think that's part of the problem, isn't it?
*sigh* I stroked you when I told you about Dieter. And you weren't really listening to the details were you?
Yes, I know you were listening. But you're here, all twitchy with me in bed. You haven't really taken it /on board/ have you?
Yes. Yes. You've accepted that I need to find ... release .. outside our marriage. But baby, /you/ need to take care of /your/ self. Okay?
*sigh* Well, clearly you haven't have you? You watched me lay out my lingerie. You /stared/ at me as I got into my nightie.
For goodness sake you even watched my brush out my hair with that puppy-dog face of yours.
And now, here you are, with a raging boner and you're all hot and bothered. How can I sleep or read with you like that?
No. No I'm not going to put you out of my bed. No. I'm not that cruel. We have to keep up, well, at least /this/ level of intimacy.
*firmly* No, I won't.
*sigh* *exasperated* I set you up with everything.
In the den.
The computer? The nice chair? The cheesecake posters on the wall. All the tissues, and the hand cream?
You need to /use/ them.
Continue reading
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I am torn by the conventions I see on GWA.
Describing what's going on or what is being _felt_ seems better, and then the performer can make of that what they will. But it feels like, if you have to say this, and it's not there in the text anyway, then aren't you failing on the show-don't-tell rule?
And trying to force the performer into a particular mind-set in that case, feels slightly creepily controlling. I know most authors say 'make of it what you will' but just making it passive is still kinda controlling. If you want it that way, read it yourself.
But then, putting, *firmly* in the script also feels kinda dumb. Don't the words imply that by themselves? How hard it is to follow those instructions, and even if you do ignore them and make-it-your-own, isn't even seeing the text kind of annoying?
Or
Just put in explicitly *exasperated* or *excited* or whatever.
Or
Just leave it plain and hope that the words inspire the performer on their own merit.
Of course, I'm anwering my own question - it's the final option. Maybe if I had more confidence in what I'm writing I wouldn't need *emotional*
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