Strict Wife Magazine.

 Back in 2011, fourteen years ago, I started writing a fake magazine called 'Strict Wife'. It started with the cover - suggestive article headlines - hinting at a magazine filled with content for Women in Female Led Relationships. You've probably seen similar kinds of things online. But I went ahead and actually wrote some articles for it and pasted in images I found.

I've been going back to it, on and off ever since. In 2019 I reformatted it and wrote a bunch of new stuff. In fact, one or two full stories began as articles in the spoof magazine and then I developed them into complete stories later.

Also, I sometimes write one-page questionnaires or short things that tongue-in-cheek might be the kind of thing you'd find in a magazine, but in a cuckold/femdom context.  I did these for this blog. "So he called you Mommy during Sex." or "Is he the right boy for you?" or "How to introduce your boyfriend into your marriage." I added those to the magazine as I did them too.

Avery Cristy is not a featured editor.

Now, with all the accumulated content  it's over 100 pages, with a lot of illustrations and images - all cribbed from the internet. 

Over time, the form and tone solidified. The magazine is supposedly written by a group of contributing editors - all women. The audience is women in FLR marriages, or who are at least FLR-curious. They conduct surveys, interview leading psychologists, publish letters, and do special series on aspects of female-led-marriages. 

There's an explicit tone and a meta-tone. On the surface, this is all serious, scholarly work for the FLR community. Their core philosophy is that men are to be loved and cherished, but many of them are weak-willed, submissive creatures who are much happier in loving, but submissive relationships with their wives. They are not to be casually abused, but physical correction can have it's place. Cuckolding is a natural, but not essential progression for a wife-led marriage. 

The meta-tone is tongue-in-cheek, rather than ironic. The parallels between a typical womens' interest magazine article and those in Strict Wife is meant to be funny. The tone of condescending affection for husbands, while advising on how to break their spirit or control their lives is also humorously intended.

This tone hides the both subtle and explicit fact that the whole magazine is about love. Even in the most outre femdom articles about cuckolding or pegging or, God-help-us, castration, the voices of the authors or readers always come back to the love they have for their husbands and their husbands for them. This stuff only works in a loving context. If you don't love your wife, then you might get angry if she sleeps with someone else, but for gut-wrenching emotional and erotic reaction, you need to love her. Similarly, many of the articles are about the emotional effort required to properly train and condition a husband. All throughout these, there's the stated caveat, that if you don't love him, then what's the point?

Loving wives care about their husband's reputation.

And the articles feed into other writing or are spin-offs from stories I'm working on. One example is the "Your Boys" article - still unfinished. In it, I wrote short excerpts from women in cuckolding FLR relationships where they discussed the confusing relationships between their husbands and their sexual partners. One of those is clearly the Ashley, Dave and Mike relationship from Dave McManus's The Reluctant Cuckold series.

So if you're interested in Reluctant Cuckold, and my attempts at a third part, here's that article (unfinished) as images - sharing the pdf is beyond blogger.

 

 

I may publish the whole thing one day but (a) many articles are unfinished (b) Some of the layout is awful, and needs a lot of work, and (c) tons of stolen images, so maybe not.

Have you been Caught?

 

Anna Claire Clouds PMV

Anna Claire Clouds PMV

 As I may have written a few times already, sometimes when I start a PMV I get very enthusiastic about and idea and then run out of steam. But sometimes, I get really into it and plough through very quickly. The difference, always, is the pornstar. And it's never how they look, but how they act in scenes.

Anna introduces herself.

Anna Claire Clouds is one of those stars that just seems to leap out of the screen. Glances, sounds, smiles, movement. She does everything so well and she's done a bunch of great scenes. She's on a career high right now, and the main thing that slowed me down on this one was that new scenes kept coming out that I felt I had to include.

Amazing scene from Amateur Allure

For this, I used two Chemical Brothers tracks, ElektroBank and Hey Boy, Hey Girl. I don't transition between them very well, partly because ElektroBank has a stupid MC part at the end and then starts really suddenly. There's no way to blend it in easily. This also makes this quite long. To be honest I had trouble finding where to cut it off. 

Only ACC is in this. She's done many many threesome and girl-girl scenes and as usual I skipped all of those so I can concentrate on her and her amazing face. I find including scenes with another actor just doesn't feel right.

Anna really puts it all into her performance

So, what's so great about her? First off - she has incredible energy. She's incapable of just lying there. She's bucking, she's writhing, she's pushing back, she's grabbing at her partner. She's also so into the scene that at times her partners seem to be just clinging on for dear life.

Anna looks amazing

Secondly, like all my favorites she gives those amazing glances under her eyelashes to the camera. I never like scenes with no eye contact and Anna just can't help catching the camera over and over. Picking out those clips was a pleasure. There's an eyelid flick around every corner and each one is more expressive than the last.

Kissing dominates the whole break section.

But what really makes her stand out is kissing. Anna kisses her partner in almost every scene she does. And not just some fake, over-directed things. She grabs them, throws an arm around them and works her face onto theirs. She loves kissing and nothing makes a scene better. I include a couple of long sections where she's just throwing herself at her partners, sometimes to their obvious shock and surprise.

There's no fancy effects or editing tricks in this. It's practically all just zoom and pan, pan and zoom. I colour-corrected some clips where the edits jarred, but apart form that it's all just Anna as the original file was published, with each clip cut to the beat of each track.

New Cartoon

 A while ago, I did this.

I've been working on another video - not a sequel, but the same style, ever since.

The basic story here is - our hero has cuckold fantasies - he jerks off to internet dommes and cuckold porn, but he doesn't ever imagine his actual wife in these scenarios - he just likes the porn. 

Then his wife, played by Eva Lovia gets a job offer to work on a TV show in L.A. - a big opportunity for her, but it will mean a month away from home. Thinking this will be a great opportunity to really indulge his cuck porn addiction, he encourages her, and even calls in a favour from an old college buddy who is now a bigshot TV producer to help secure her the job. 

There's a tearful goodbye as she jets off. But before he gets a chance to revel in the privacy and his cuck porn collection, his wife calls to say her sister needs a place to stay for a while , so shes going to move into their spare room for an open-ended period.

His sister in law, played by Emma Lux, is totally different to his innocent wife. She sees straight through him to see the beta cuck loser he really is. Within days she's ferreted out his porn collection, his online accounts and his particular shameful fetish. 

Emma explains the awful truth.

She blackmails and manipulates him, and within a couple of weeks he's been manoeuvred intoto agreeing to his wife cucking him in LA with the friend he called in the favour for. Emma makes this look like it's all his idea. There's a series of escalating video calls with his wife as she casting-couches her way to success, where he has to pretend he's cool with all this. Meanwhile the sister in law humiliates, teases and bullies him at home. 

There's quite a bit of ambiguity and double-meaning in the conversations between Peter and Eva, where he thinks she's asking his agreement for her to interview for bigger roles, but it could also mean she's asking if he's okay with her hooking up with his friend.

In the scenes with Emma, she never explicitly blackmails him, although she's sure to leave that impression as she takes compromising photos and videos of him.

I'm happy with the casting choices. I have a ton of clips of Eva on the phone, doing cam stuff, interviews etc. And her higher-class videos for Digital Playground and Vixen have loads of story elements.  Emma is just so deliciously mean and has done so much content it's relatively easy to find clips that work.

As before though, the whole process of cutting, copying, prequelling and porting the files is a pain. Also, the timing and pacing is so awkward in Premiere - getting text and visuals to line up in interesting ways is painful and making edits to them is exasperating as you work with the video, frames, text boxes etc. etc.

The process pf writing it, is even more organic than with a standard PMV. I have a rough outline of where the scene is going, pick clips for that, lay them out, switch the positions, closeups etc. so it has some visual interest. But making text match the visual to match the text is a back-and-forth balancing act, so when I have a good scene I'll try to write dialog to match it, but other times I can't write what I want because there's no clip that can make it work visually. 

Emma reassures her cuck

The main problem though is that I tend to write dialog-heavy, over-written screeds of text. Cutting it down to the most-impactful essentials is really difficult. Comics are not supposed to be walls of text with a few pictures. I have to constantly fight the urge to blurb ever longer paragraphs into text boxes. This is a battle I am consistently losing.

My appreciation for comic writers and artists grows all the time. Even if I had complete freedom to create any image in a panel I don't think I could do much better than my clumsy efforts. Brevity, and show-don't-tell are the hardest things to master. 

I estmate this is around two thirds towards a complete first draft. But I have to go back and fix timings in a lot of places, and where I've done simple text boxes and a frame of video or two, I need to rework sections so it's more visually arresting. Plus, groan, a lot of the text needs to be edited down to make it concise. The groan there is that reducing text means reducing video length with all the knock-on effects. 

I'm constantly amazed at the visual impact that this cartoon filter has. I'm working with images of two of the most beautiful women, ever, but when I lay out the cartoonified images they have an impact that seems even greater than the originals. Does this mean I'm intimidated by real women and really see them as unreal fantasy figures? Yes, probably. In fact, that should have been obvious some time ago.

Cuck therapy.

As usual the idea of publishing this gives me the heebie jeebies. Not that it's disturbing - as usual the whole story is suffused with love and affection. There's always a happy-ever-after for me. But even more than with a PMV, I've taken clips of performers work and mashed them into something else. I've put words in their mouths and presented the whole as my own work. I doubt Eva Lovia would care one jot at this time, but Emma Lux is a working performer making amazing content. I doubt she'd give permission for this to be published and worse, she might be really annoyed and upset about it. Making either of them unhappy is a horrible idea. 

I plan to send Emma a message telling her about it. While it's not her words, and the video is changed, who know, she might like it, and I'll put promotional messages for her IWC and onlyfans all over it. Eva is a different matter, she has her podcast now, and I can't imagine there's a bunch of cuck-hounds who want to subscribe to it. Though of course, there's just her coffee tip-jar thing, so maybe I could promote that.

This is just window-dressing to assuage my guilt at stealing their content and repurposing it of course. 

Working on the project is fun, but frustrating. I don't get to write at the pace I'd like. The visuals make it more restrictive and editing is a pain. But, working on the double path where the text feeds off the available scenes and the visuals inspire the text is very satisfying. 

I think this one will finish up being around twelve minutes long. I'm sometimes inclined to write it as an actual story but I'd feel guilty about writing anything while Ashley Mike and Dave linger on my hard drive, accusing me when I waste hours on other stuff.

Cuck Storm Replacement Comments.

 Didn't expect so many comments. It's great. Thank you all.

I feel guilty that I've only shared excerpts. I'm planning to share the first four chapers (the first one is much the same, breakfast-in-bed one from the first version) and an outline of all the rest. I've written a bunch of those, but they don't all connect up yet. 

In the meantime, because Blogger's comments are so crap - 

It’s hard to say what’s too much when you only have fragments to go by. Like you said in your earlier post, the slow burn of his cuckolding needed the mundane chapters to help build up the impact of the erotic ones. Everytime he thinks things are going back to normal, he gets hammered by his cucking. If you have enough downtime between the erotic events, I think it should be fine.

 I have two storylines that serve for downtime - his increasing success and dynamism at work and Ashley's increasing dissatisfaction with her own. As I see it, his attempts to distract himself from his reaction to Ashley cucking him make him work harder. Plus, they way this whole scenario has knocked him out of his complacency make him more of a risk-taker, which leads to good outcomes for work. But he never connects this to him becoming more attractive to Ashley, even though it is. 

It takes a while to reveal, but the rumours about Ashley in her workplace are affecting her. Her colleagues disrespect her, eventually leading to her leaving that workplace and changing her career.

I really liked the characterization of Ashley. You made it clear that she pities Dave which indicates that she does care for him. Seeing your husband reduced in status like that can’t be easy. But also, you can see her cunning. She knows that if she controls his orgasms, she controls the relationship. In this way, the nofap plot line is very logical. It makes me think that Ashley’s mother is going to play a much bigger role in our perception of the character. She and Ashley’s father got divorced at a young age, and this is an attempt to prevent that fate from ever happening to her.

I don't know if she pities him. She's intrigued by his reaction. She absolutely does love him, and she loves the way this lifestyle makes her feel, but she's concerned that if he continues to masturbate alone then their relationship will suffer. Plus, although he loves feeling slutty and Dave knowing about it, she shies away from him seeing her as she's just old-school embarrassed about someone watching her fuck. Especially as she's so submissive with Mike and she feels Dave might lose respect for her if he actually witnesses this in person. This is exacerbated by the way Mike talks about it - he's most interested in the cuck dynamic where he is essentially dominating Dave, by dominating her, and she doesn't really buy into that in the same way.

The audio at the end was a neat idea. It does seem pretty elaborate for a new cuckoldress to do. But like I said, without reading the work as a whole, it’s hard to tell if it’s too much too soon and it is an idea that I don’t see often. I’m wondering if he’s going to not go for it, but then he gets caught snooping on her laptop or something later. It would be a temptation that he can’t resist.

She wants them to do this together. Before this she's tried different ways for her and Dave to have sex in a cuckold context, short of him watching live. She wants him to jerk off over her in a way she controls. This is her latest attempt. There's video to follow in this scene. The point (for her) is for Dave to talk to her about how he feels.

From Another Anonymous user, or the same one, who can tell?

I liked this excerpt more than the one with Mike - think I have a vague disagreement about importance of Mike. Would rather see her go back to Jim, do something with Jay, and continue with Ryan and Chang stuff. Mike is great and he can be focus but I am less interested in them *dating*. That being said, I love it all, lol.

Given your photo choice, I'd love to see Ashley also open up with a sleeve tattoo or getting her tits pierced with Tamara. 100 percent agree with wanting to know more about submissive shirt. 

Oof. I'm pretty invested in Mike. I don't think we'll actually 'see' her with anyone else. That said, there's a world of imagination out there. Jim Murta is problematic for Ashley. However, Jay does feature in a fantasy session early on. (That fantasy scene in his parents house is one of the best in the originals I think).

Ryan and Chang never really did it for me, but there's that whole party with the submissive TeeShirt and Tamara to revisit. I'm writing that at the moment.

From Bermugandr

I don't think the pace is too fast. I think the previous version was maybe a bit too fast but I really liked the content in general. I wanted to see what happened next and the interactions with the friend and anther guy. To me I think an increase in pace was needed at this point. It's like the beginning of a coaster where you go slow as your pulled up to the top. I felt like at the end of the second book we where at the top of the coaster. Like at some point his internal tension has to break one way or another, no change in pace isn't realistic either. Often the first step is the hardest and things snowball from there with each step after coming faster. Either he starts accepting bit by bit that he wants to be cuckolded and a Sissy or he has to reject to all together.

I'm of the view that the originals work so well because while he thinks he wants to reject this, every action he takes is a subconscious attempt to embrace it. He sabotages himself at every turn. When he accepts it,  even bit by bit, the story is over. If he rejects it, then it turns into something different where Ashley is doing this to him over his protests.  I'm trying to keep that mental dichotomy up in Dave's head, but each ratchet makes it more and more unbelievable. 

I really liked the revaluation that she had been doing her own research and wasn't just going along with what mike told her to do. It removes a lot of his fears. I think your set up in this section could maybe be near to the front and a good jumping off point into something from your previous long story which is her own research, that outside of the games in there normal life he's still her man and husband and only his whining makes her lose any real respect for him.

Yeah. Ashley is smart. She sees through Mike's self-serving bullshit easier than Dave. She likes spending time with him and she loves fucking him, but essentially he's a friend who she could never be with as a partner. From the start, she's realised there's something slightly twisted in Mike. He's more interested in his Dominant relationship with Dave than with her. He likes fucking her, but that's mostly because it's a way to reinforce his dominance of Dave. He has no interest in being with a single woman. So of course, she's done her own research and she realises not everything is as it seems. 

She knows Dave's whining is not the full story - it's obvious he's really getting off on the whole scene. What she wants is for him is to be able to have a 'cuckold orgasm' with her. 

If you want her to continue as a loving wife, it's also key for her to tell him and him to slowly understand it's there love that makes this so good for her and makes it work at all. Like maybe on an arousal scale sex with him alone is like a 2, sex with mike alone is like a 5, she wouldn't be able to let go so much without him in the picture, but watching him masturbate to her and mikes video is like an 8 and having sex with Mike knowing that love of her life is at home unable to get pleasure and that he's thinking about how the love of his life is out with another man is like a 100. Not exactly like that and he may not full believe it at first. 

Mostly agree, except I'd reverse those last two - her ideal scene is Dave (submissively) jerking off over her after she's been completely satisfied. Imagining Dave denied and desperate while she gets fucked by Mike is cool, but she really wants to hear how she makes him feel and how, for him, she's this incredibly unattainable forbidding sexual being who's also a totally wanton slut. 

Same user? Different?  Who Knows? But, wow. You've put so much thought into this. Thank you. I'm sure it's not desreved.

So story board idea using a lot of what you already have.
1. This is before any camera's get installed and is the first video he sees.
2. She doesn't say anything just teases him with the video and her body and it doesn't take long till he's close.
4. She then pauses and it's just as she starts to give Mike a blowjob. Tells him she's never seen him this hard before nor leaking so much precum and he see's her start to masturbate. He see's an opportunity to convince her that she's what turn him on and not what she's doing. She says that's not true, that it's not just her but what she's doing to him. She then tells him Mike's not the first big cock she's sucked, he mumbles about Jim. She ignores this and say nor was Jim. But never until now was she turned on by giving a guy a blow job. It was the fact that she was giving Mike a blowjob while he, her husband and the man she loves, was at home locked up and unable to get any pleasure. That in this part he was the only thing turning her on and now he get's to see he give mike one of the best blowjobs ever because of how turned on her husband made her. He whines about this which causes her to stop masturbating and rebuke him that only his whining is causing her to lose respect for him.
5, She stops any come back by starting the video and his eye's are drawn to the screen. He tell himself he'll show her by not saying anything or masturbating. However, as if it has a mind of it's own his body takes over and he starts to masturbate and in no time he's close again.
6. Pause again. She tells him he must love being her cuck because he can't look away and masturbates so hard. After all he could just look at her and not the screen if it was really just about her. He decides to try and just not say anything but vows to himself he'll just keep looking at her.

7. However, just as it resumes he her's a slap and his eyes are immediately drawn to the screen. Distantly he hears her giggle but can't tear himself away as he's seeing his wife worship with her mouth another, larger cock while moaning after each slap. After a little bit of this he's close again and she pauses.

8. It's an effort but after a bit he's able to tear his eyes from the screen and back to her. She giggles again seeing his struggle and then starts to masturbate again. He asks her if he'd spank her would she go back to being his again. This time it's less whining and more begging or pleading which turns her on more. She explains that he couldn't as he's not that type of man. He starts to try and say something but she cut's him off. Saying she could never love or be with the type of man who could spank her or dominate her like Mike does. She know from experience loving or being with that type of man comes with more negatives than it's worth and what she's found with him is deeper than just sex after all big dicked dominate guys are a dime a dozen but a man who likes being cucked and is strong enough to let her cuck him is one in a million. She masturbating while saying this turned on by what she's doing to him but he can also see the deep love in her for him in her eyes.

9. Seeing her love for him echoed in his eyes she tells him that he can cum on her foot but he has to thank her for cucking him while he does.

10. At this point he's lost every argument pushing him further into a submission to her and his fears temporarily put to rest his true desire comes out. He thanks her profusely for cucking him while having the biggest orgasm of his life. She also has a big orgasm as she see's him cum.

11. before the come down can start she grabs his attention an tells him if he wants to see more of the video he has to lick his cum off her foot. Which he does and after finishing as he's hitting the low he see's her counting down.

12. Then you can have the after care scene you did previously. Give him the chance to stop it if he wants, he doesn't.

13.I think for timeline purposes a time skip would work well. Like they keep watching the video while masturbating and she shares what she was thinking/feeling and turned her on. Maybe the next scene is them at the end of the video with some progressions. He's not hesitating about thanking her for cucking him she's masturbating but now maybe wearing loose clothing so he just see her hands moving under her clothes. I don't think you need to show every little step and you included him masturbating with her clothed previously and I thought that was as good place for this to end up.

2/2

  You get to the difficulty with all this in point 13. It's too much in one scene, hitting every cuck thing in one session. If we're time-skipping in and out, like a movie might do, then you can string it out but the tension gets broken with every skip. To be honest, I think you suffer from the exactly the same eat-all-the-sweeties-in-the-bag-all-at-once problem that I do.

A the end of this scene he's thanking her for cucking him and after that, there's really nowhere to go.

Back the the point by point - I don't think she can only enjoy giving blowjobs knowing that Dave is denied - I think she does like sex, it's just better for her if it's kind of slutty. 

On the whining - in what I've written this time around, she never directly rebukes him for whining - it's always Mike. In fact, for her, while nobody likes listening to whining, she knows this is a symptom of the fact that her cucking him is eating him up. If he stopped whining it might meant he was becoming indifferent or inured to it, which wouldn't be a good thing for her. What she worries about is (a) them growing apart because of the cucking - indirectly because he's masturbating alone and (b) Dave and Mike getting into open conflict over her, because of Mike needling and belittling him, which she kind of enjoys in a dommy way, but she's aware - boys will be boys - that this kind of bullying might degenerate into open conflict which she'd have to end by dumping Mike. 

On the spanking - 'I like it but not from a man I love' - agree, but I don't think she'd spell it out so openly. As an aside AprilW9 - also known as AprilWould is a GWA audio performer on reddits GoneWildAudio forum. She has a really great cuckold audio on exactly this theme - Like to the reddit post,   Link to my blogpost about it.  

In it, she says something exactly like this while her bull is spanking her. Strong reccomend.

Phew. Anyhow, like I say above, I feel like I've whetted a lot of appetites and I hope I can satisfy them. I'm reluctant to push out much more until I can get a solid set of chapters, even the first four or so, that I'm totally happy with. When I get a chance I'll map out the outlines for each chapter and the first chapters I'm okay with, which may be nearer the middle as I'm finding the beginning the hardest.

Thanks for all the comments. I'm very enthused.

Al.

 

More Cuck Storm Replacement Service.

 Blogger feels like the worst platform for this stuff. The comment system is atrocious. I think about moving to Medium, but the hassle puts me off. 

Anyway, I got some kind comments, and I wanted to post another excerpt. 

In the meantime - 

More analysis after a second read. You’ve definitely nailed the tone again and the goal of making the cuckolding more indirect to keep it inline with the books was accomplished. I also liked the story about Mike’s past. It gives more context about why he is the person he is and also plays to the “mommy” theme that was very prevalent in the first two books. It also brings to mind the “Alfie” dog story Dave tells in the first book.

The excerpt feels much more connected to the first two books and I can tell how much your analysis has helped. Your point about the main storyline is well made and I’m wondering if there even needed to be a fourth book like was initially announced. It seems like there wouldn’t be enough material unless the original author planned on creating some arbitrary drama like many of the big genre authors tend to do. The author reminds me a bit of the director Michael Bay in a way. He made some good movies but doesn’t actually understand why those movies were considered good nor how to replicate that success in his other work. Like Bay, I don’t think the original author has any idea why his first two books were successful. It’s very possible that you have a better understanding of his work then he ever did.

I don't know about tone. McManus is able to write Dave's inner monologue so well. It feels like you're inside his head. I keep going back to action and dialogue. And my stuff is so wordy. 

I'd totally forgotten about the fat kid and Alfie. That whole sequence in the beach house is so well done. Nothing actually happens but Dave works himself into a total lather in 24 hours. If I'd written that, there would have been an orgy in the hot tub in the first hour.

In my view of Mike, which I haven't really worked into the story much, he is all about domination of other men. He sees sex almost exclusively as a power trip. He doesn't want single women. he only gets off on the power of humiliating other men. There's more of this in other chapters. The childhood story is true, the key point being that he says he didn't bully the other kid, but he did. 

I doubt I have a better understanding of what makes the original two books so good. I certainly can't recreate them. He's able to paint the light and shade very well. I think the problem with the story is the same problem for all cuckold stories. The start is always the best part and after the very first scene, it's all epilogue. 

Cuckolding is a wife going with another man. Once it's happened, it's all repetition. Sure, you can spice it up, escalate it, but the vital 'Oh God, No. Why do I like this?' moment is essentially a once-off, and you're chasing that high for the rest of the book. Sequels even more so. 

All that said, here's a spicing-it-up excerpt from earlier than the other one. I've lest in my own notes and stuff at the top. [doorman] means I can't remember his name and I have to go back and fix it later. 

Another Extract

This is roughly two thirds of the way through. As you'll read, Ashley has been increasingly closing down his masturbation. She's going to a work function of Mike's as Mike's date and will be staying over at a hotel. Is this too much? This 'NoFap' storyline is the main Dave-Ashley interaction. The other main one is the Dave-Mike humiliation one where Mike increasingly engineers situations where he can humble Dave. 

The intention is that this scene flows into Ashley encouraging him to masturbate in front of her, using audio and video of her and Mike together as a lure. That still feels like too much too fast. I haven't written that bit yet, and I'm leaning toward Dave refusing to go along with it but I don't know what that does to the story. 

Input much appreciated.

If you don't want to struggle with comments, alamopreacher@gmail.com will reach me.

Cuck Storm Replacment : Attempt two

 A while ago I made an attempt to write the third book in David McManus's Reluctant Cuckold series.

I say attempt, because while I enjoyed writing it, and I got a lot of good feedback, I didn't think it was all that good and eventually it ran into the sand. I made a few attempts to 'fix' it, I never felt I was getting anywhere and I abandoned the effort.

Well, it ate away at me. I kept returning to re-read "Reluctant" and "Horizon" and appreciate them more and more. 

Here's the things I thought were wrong with my attempt, in no particular order.

• It moved way too fast. Ten chapters took place over a couple of days.
• I went straight from explicit sex scene to sex scene too rapidly.
• I didn't get enough of Dave's internal monologue and retrospection in, which is a hallmark of the originals.
• I didn't do enough fantasising. Some of the best passages in the originals take place in Dave's head.
• There's very little face-to-face time with Mike. Mike humiliating Dave directly are also really good scenes, but I shied away from these.
• Ashley and Dave get super explicit about femdom, cuckolding and FLR straight away. The glancing-off-it unstated nature of the originals is lost almost immediately.

For me, the key point in the originals come after Ashley invites Mike back and they close the door on Dave. 

When Mike says “I think we’re going to have a little private time now.” That's the point that a good book gets really very good. What makes it even better is that there's almost no explict sex that evening. They turn the music up too loud. It's all in Dave's head.

Amazingly, McManus pulls this off again in the second book. 

“Dave,” she said, “I think we’re going to retire now, okay?”

“You’re going to bed?” I said.

“Yeah, we’re going to the bedroom now, okay?” 

If anything, this is even better.  These exchanges work so well because McManus has done so much work leading up to these scenes and he's been so subtle in painting the relationship between Ashley and Dave.  

To try to get more familiar with the spirit of the originals, I did a couple of things. First, I made an index for the first two books. Here's an excerpt. I wanted to count and see where these topics came up. There's three pages of this.

I used Sarah Evaliina to illustrate.

Then I made a time-line. How much time passes between events. In the originals, future events - Ashley going out with Mike, them meeting up etc. are flagged in advance which makes the book flow better. 

And while I did those, I wrote short summaries of each chapter in the first two books.

In short, I took it all apart to see how it ticked.

During previous rewrite attempts, I'd written some passages which I liked, and now I'd written more, but they weren't linked together.  So, I tried to write some sort of structure for the book to hang them in and try to avoid the pitfalls that I'd repeatedly fallen into.

As a hobby, do-it-for-the-fun-of-it kind of writer, I never think about structure. I just sit down, start writing and see where it goes. Obviously, this is bad. All my bad habits and foibles have free reign and get amplified by this stream-of-bullshit way of writing. 

I think Hemmingway said that writing is easy. You just sit at your typewriter and bleed onto the page. In short, it's hard work, and it's painful. 

My hardest challenge in all this was keeping away from the incredible gravitational pull of Dave and Ashley talking explicitly about what's going on. Dom-female to Sub-male dialog is my catnip. But in the originals, this never happens. They glance off each other. Discussions are not explicit. Things are left unsaid. Nothing ever concludes. 

In my first attempted rewrite, I broke this rule straight away. Ashley makes Dave say that he is her cuck in chapter two. She then makes him jerk off onto her foot. And from there on, the relationship is irrevocably changed. Now, I liked writing that chapter. Readers said it was hot. But if Bruce Willis and Sybil Sheppard had got it on  in the first episode of Moonlighting, then nobody would have watched episode two.

I had to keep more of this unsaid. More meaningful silences. More talking at cross-purposes. More ambiguity.

But of course, it's hard to keep that believable, given all that's happened in the first two books.

There is an idea of fiction of rising and falling action, with each cycle getting faster and more heightened until a crisis, and then denouement. I wanted to follow this idea, which I think is present in the originals. In the originals they meet up with friends, or we hear a lot about Dave's work, or they spend time doing couple stuff together. In fact, that's two thirds of the books. It's not sex-scene to sex-scene to sex scene. I tried hard to make these parts interesting. 

I have to admit that on my first read-through of Reluctant and Horizon, I kinda fast-forwarded through all the scenes in Dave's work or the going-out-as-couples with their friends. But these scenes are essential to the tone and pacing of the book.

Also, there is an idea of a story's plot, the main storyline, and sub-plots which contrast with the main storyline and give more substance.

For me, the main storyline is Dave and Ashley's relationship. His reluctance to accept that he is a cuckold, and her grinding away at his resistance - the final crisis being his acceptance, maybe even embracing of the lifestyle.

The subplots are Mike and Dave sparring off each other, and (continuing from the original) Dave's failures and victories in his workplace.

That main storyline is hard to keep in check. When I re-read Reluctant and Horizon, it's surprising just how dominant Ashley is. Early in Horizon she makes him enter chastity, but it's all done so  carefully that it doesn't feel forced. When I wrote equivalent scenes, they felt like a slam in the face. I tried hard to work on the tone, less jump-scare, more rising dread for David.

Finally, I decided the answers to some key questions I felt I had to have clarity on. Here's a few examples.

• Does Ashley actually want him to watch?
• Why hasn't she invited him to?
• Can she be with someone else? Jim? Mike jealousy?
• The 'submissive' tee shirt party  - what happened?
• Did Ashley go to Mike’s after US Open?
• Was there someone before Murta?
• Has Tamara met Mike

I've written about as many words now as there is in either Horizon or Reluctant. But, I know I'm going to dump up to half of it, and I still have a lot of 'connective tissue' to write.

I'm still actively working on it and there's no part I'm 100% happy with.

In the meantime, here's an excerpt, a part I like and will keep in the final version to some degree.

The context for this is - it's later in the story - in the second half. Ashley has started to forbid Dave to masturbate for periods. Mike is about to go away on a business trip. Dave is determined to make the most of the Mike-free time. He's bought her a fancy lingerie set, intending to give it to her once Mike is gone but she sees the bag and he can't resist giving it to her early. Then he has to go to a bar to meet Mike and bring him back later. Ashley wants them to be friends.

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Some people have commented or emailed encouragement to work on this. Thank you all so much. It really does help to give me momentum. 

Some people suggested a tip jar or something like that. No need. To be clear, I'm never going to sell this. It's too close to the original author's work and it wouldn't be right to charge for it.

When I have a draft I feel is okay I'll make it available here for free. 

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A bad idea : Cartoon PMV

A Bad Idea : A cartoonPMV

Did something different recently. Not a PMV, more a kind of comic/cartoon story thing.

A while ago I started seeing video clips with a cartoon filter, like the one on the left. I liked these a lot, but I didn't know what had created them and I tried to get a similar effect using After Effect's cartoon filter. The results weren't good but I noodled about with making an animated cuckold cartoon. I didn't like the overall effect though and I abandoned it ... until ... I saw that the filter was from an app called prequel. 

I downloaded it onto my phone and tried it on some clips. Very, very nice. The only problem was that it's only available on phones and I could find no equivalent plugin. 

But i was so pleased with it that I started a new cuckold animated comic thing, painstakingly selecting clips. moving them to the phone, applying the filter, saving and moving them back.

But I really, really liked the effect. 

To begin with, I made pretty basic 'pages'. When I was noodling around I'd tried to animate the frames themselves and that was (a) massively fiddly and (b) confusing to read. So I kept it pretty simple.

Initially, I'd made actual pages, which flipped over, but I abandoned this too, making parts more like scenes which moved the story along.

For the (very tropey) story - man visits domme, develops cucky fantasies, admits it all to his wife, turns out she's cucking him all along - I intercut the scenes with his wife with ones with Crystal Knight - the domme. For those, there are only clips of crystal staring down the viewer, usually full-screen.

But for the scenes with Kimber, I needed more than just sex. I had to have some talky scenes and ones where she interacts more-or-less normally. That was why I'd chosen Kimber, because I had several such scenes with her. In retrospect, although Kimber is lovely, if I was doing this again I'd go with one of the stars from MyWifeIsMyPornstar, ideally one who did a HouseWife 1 on 1. Allie Haze springs to mind.

That's not to diss Kimber, who is outstanding and amazingly pretty but I found myself hunting for more scenes rather than having to re-use the couple of minutes of footage I had.

Since I'd been concentrating so hard on getting clips and moments from the stock I had, I just let the story wander along as I usually do. Scene suggests text which suggests next scene and on and on. Being able to switch between Kimber and Crystal was great as I could make the story develop without having to make everything match up. Also, variety. 

At the start I'd assumed all this would be silent, but as I moved into the sec scenes I felt it would be better to have those scenes with some kind of moaning sex from the actual scene. Which meant music for the rest. Obviously having dialog and lip movements match was impossible but I reckoned the viewer would be able to just ignore that. In any case, the text is mostly narration. But with the Crystal scenes - where she's playing a Domme, encouraging our hero to be a cuck, well, half of her stuff is exactly that. So it was too tempting to take some sections of her speech and incorporate them. I tried not to do this too directly, as I wouldn't be able to make it work for the whole story and then it would be confusing. 

But adding sound was a new burden on editing and sine I hadn't done this from the start I had to go back and fill in more. Plus. while I'd just let some low-key techno be the background, if the sound was more of a thing, now I wanted to make sections match the mood of the piece, emphasise the impact of scenes and play more of a part like a PMV. 

In truth though, the real difficulty was the text and video matching. text requires time to read before the next piece appears, and some time needs to remain to appreciate each visual element too. Ideally, these line up in a logical flow, hopefully adding impact to the text with the visuals. So I'd estimate that 50% of the editing time had been spent adjusting the timing and length of text, slowing or speeding up visuals to make them match and moving text around the screen so the viewers eye can follow it logically, but it doesn't obscure important parts of the visual. Plus, to keep some of the original comic book panel style I didn't want to just blat out screen-filling video and plonk text on it. I wanted insets and transitions which were visually interesting and added to the scene. Hours were lost fiddling with boxes and speed ramps and animation to make this work and inevitable compromises had to be made.

 

So why do it? Because for some reason, I think the comic-art effect makes the visual better somehow. It's hrd to explain, but somehow those clean lines and smooth tones make it all sexier. If I'd done exactly this with the original, non-filtered video it would look okay, but it wouldn't pop like it does. That's partly because I like these kind of cucky stories and having the text boxes and panel-style art makes it work as familiar format. Making each scene feels very satisfying and I'm really making these things just for myself. 

Back to the story. This is the kind of thing that I've landed on now. Kimber is casually cruel but there's always a possibility that she really loves our hero. She knows this is what he wants and she's happy to give it to him. She's never going to leave him. In fact, she goes to a lot of trouble to make him happy, even though that means being incredibly mean to him, cucking and humiliating him. 

His sessions with Crystal and his memories of them make it a bit fresher than the standard cuck story and being able to match text with images so exactly is kind of what makes it fun. I learned a new respect for those layout and lettering people you see in comic credits. Positioning the text so it fits well with the images is damn tricky.

To be honest, it all got a bit out of control. I was at 20 minutes duration with no denouement in sight, partly due to me going back and adding more into the earlier sections as ideas struck me and I found more suitable clips. 

I hope I didn't take too much of a cop out at the end. I've always preferred a happy-ever-after ending and I think going further would just have been more repetition. 

If I go again, I want to find sources where the star has done as many interviews as possible - need scenes of her talking to camera. Eye-to-camera sex scenes, and ideally some femdom scenes too. There's probably a few stars who've done that. AJ Applegate maybe. Or maybe Allie Haze, especially as she's got three of those MWMP videos.

The story leads inevitable to a scene with Kimber and her boyfriend where our hero gets to watch. As usual, there's places the story could go afterwards but these are never quite as satisfying as the build-up. So I just ended it there, with our hero ind of blissed out by the whole experience. I don't really see myself going back to it.

I did, however, start on a new one in the same vein with Emma Lux in the domme role (though in this case she's our hero's bitchy sister-in-law) and Eva Lovia in the wife role. Eva has loads of scenes from Naughty America and Digital playground with a several-minute long setup which can be easily adapated for the talky and normal-life scenes. Plus, she did a whole bunch of interviews which are great. Who knows if I'll finish this, but I'm four-for-four so far on Eva Lovia PMV completion so who knows.

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I just get it for the pictures.