Okay, so I have been working on this, on and off. However, mostly what I've been doing is cutting stuff out and moving scenes around to try to make the story a slow build rather than the confusing roller-coaster it is now. As I've mentioned before, my failing is that I get too into a scene and make it way too cucky way too early. Plus, I have just too much of Dave and Ashley talking explicitly and not enough of Dave experiencing things passively.
That said, I have added new scenes. I don't know if I've mentioned it before, but I introduced a new character near the start - Maddie, a semi-professional domme who Dave bumps into and who gives him some insight. I've been on-again off-again about keeping her in but right now, she's still in the main story. One thing that happens with her is that she looks up one of Mike's previous 'conquests' and helps Dave to get in touch with him.
Dave knows that Mike not only cucked this guy - Simon - but also helped defraud him of a lot of money in a dubious investment scheme. Dave gets in touch, tells him a little of his situation and he agrees to talk to him.
