Cuck Storm Replacment. A continuation of Reluctant Cuckold and Cuck Storm Horizon by David McManus.

 I used to read a lot of cuck fiction, but since I stared writing my own and making PMVs, not so much. However, there was one story I kind of half-remembered and went back to recently. "The Reluctant Cuckold" by David McManus. It's on amazon - here.  It was just as good as I remembered it. What makes it stand out is that it really, really takes it's time in the build-up and it spends a lot of time inside the cuckold protagonists head. Which makes it sound boring and slow, but it's not because inside is head is a maelstrom of doubts and self-delusion and denial. he imagines conversations that might happen or could happen as he endlessly tortures himself with an incident where his wife cheated on him. 

He becomes so obsessed with this that he ends up pursuing a path of letting her cuckold him again, even while deluding himself that he's trying to sop obsessing about it. It's so well done that even small incidents get blown up into powerful emotional surges and the reader is drawn inexorably into his world.

So, it turns out there's a sequel - Cuck Storm Horizon  - that seamlessly follows from the first book. It's just as good - the only criticism is that he spends too much time away from his wife in the first half and there's fewer opportunities for him to be triggered. But after he gets home, it really heats up.

The first book is from 2011 second book came out on Amazon kindle in 2014. A three year gap and as  far as I know, he never wrote anything else. At the end of 2016, he did an interview, here where he said the publication of a third book - Cuckold Uncharted - was imminent but it has never appeared.

The first cuck story I ever wrote was a continuation - really a rewrite - of an existing story I liked. Since then I've written a lot more cuck fiction. So I've had a go at doing a third part myself. I can't write like him, and that wouldn't be much fun either, but I liked the characters and the setup so much I wanted to give it a go.

After a first draft, I'm disappointed with it. As is always my failing, I just can't help driving the action on way too quickly. I make Ashely go out and buy cameras so Dave can watch her fuck, and before there's even a chance to use them, Mike is fucking her at the kitchen table. David McManus would be horrified at my helter-skelter pace. Worse, I couldn't keep up the introspection after page two and it's all just exposition. 

So, I'm having another go. Unpicking it all back the the next morning and trying again. This time, I'm going to try to recreate the impact of some of the best parts in the original. The ones that stuck in my mind - the ones that made me go back were the moments when the protagonist realises his wife is about to go to bed with her stud. It's her manner in those moments that are so good. "We're going to go to bed now honey, okay?" It's all been leading up to this, but in an understated, ambiguous way and then it hits him. And she's looking for assent, but she knows it's coming. There's a slightly sad, but terribly exciting feel to these moments and they can't happen without a lot of build-up.

Update : So I went back to it and rewrote a lot of it. I added a lot more introspection and used that to low it all down more. But, I'm stuck again. The cameras are a problem for me. I want dialog and the cameras are one-way sound. I think the scenes where he listens at the door in the original don't work so well either. So I have to get around that somehow. Plus, I'm drawn to the impact of the first time David is in the room is more of Mike going. "I'm going to fuck her right here." That's sudden and jarring, and I like that, but it goes against the pace of the story. It's all fixable. I'll do another chapter. 

Update June 2022

I wrote a lot more. As much and a half again, and I re-wrote some of the earlier parts. I'm still not happy but I found when I eliminated Ashley being more explicit with David, it began to lose any sense of reality. She really has to push him more after the birthday night. 

I did it as an ebook (I work in InDesign). The ebook is here. It has some NSFW pictures as chapter breaks. 

I also generated a PDF, no images. Here.

Comments welcome and appreciated, here or or on GoodReads

Xxylana Marie PMV

Perky, Pretty Xxlayna Pounded Perfectly.

Crystal Method did a song called "Name of the Game" which was used in a number of video games back in the day. The one I remember was 'Splinter Cell' which perhaps reveals my age. Anyhoo, it's a great track with a very solid beat, just perfect for a PMV.

A while ago, my idea for this track was to pick good clips of a number of girls, and concentrate on them one at a time. Abella Danger, Xxlayna Marie, Aaliyah Hadid and others. But as I did the Aaliyah Hadid sections, I got so enamoured with her, that I spun it out to a different PMV altogether. When I went back to it, I finished the Abella Danger bit, but then, Xxlayna entranced me too and then I found even more amazing videos she's done, so this is spin-off 2. I may never finish the original. 

This video uses a lot of the HussiePass vid Xxlayna did with Jax Slayer. In fact, I had to try hard not to over-use that scene because it' so good. But the BBG one she did with them is also excellent and the other two BG ones aren't bad either. The great thing is that all four have extended BTS videos. I don't know why, but I always liked BTS scenes where the cameras, lights, etc. are in view. There's something extra pornographic about seeing the scene filmed with the crew moving about. So I mix those scenes in quite a bit with the actual filmed scenes. 

Xxlayna has done some other great ones though. A Bang : Pretty and Raw BBG is really good as well as all the Dadcrush ones she did. She seems to really go for those stepdad/stepbrother ones, or maybe she particularly got offered those. 

In many of those, Xxlayna is getting banged pretty hard, often doggy style, and those scenes are great for beat-matching so there's a lot of just extended sections where she's getting pounded to those beats. I re-used the original tracks break section a couple of times just to get as much of that in as possible. To be honest, I could have kept the whole thing going for twice as long, but quality over quantity won out. 

And there's so much quality. There's her two Netgirl scenes, a bangbros and two nympho scenes. With all this hot porn, Xxlayna is really spoiling us. She vocalises a lot too. I spent a bit of time trying to get the best audio. YMMV - sometimes people say the voice drowns out the music, other people say they can't hear words because of the track. For me, I want groaning and moaning in the background and words to be clear. Somtimes it's hard to make out on the orginal. If you can't tell what she's saying, it's probably something about the size of 'Daddy's' cock.

Thnakfully, many of these scenes concentrate on her face. She is incredibly pretty and has these, huge, dark eyes. When they hit the camera it's like being mind-melded with her. She really is amazing. 

I screwed around with masks and pointillist generated effects in this one. I wish I'd stuck to a single style, but I was experimenting, so there's a bewildering variety of crazy stuff happening in the faster scenes. I timed the original track to a neat 10 frames per beat at 29.97 which meant only speeding it up by a few percent, so it's faster than the original, but not chipmunk fast. I used a lot of masks in this one to pul out the background and either add a background effect or a distance blur so Xxlayna seems to pop out of the screen. I really need to start convertng these to the target frame rate. When AE generates the MOV file I use in Premiere, if the frame rate doesnt match, I can't pull in the background and make it match each frame. Mostly it doesn't matter, but in places it leads to ghosting. But there's so much going on in those clips it probably looks intentional.

Splicing the BTS and the filmed scenes together was very satisfying. You get a dual-camera effect, but that wasn't available for some of the key scenes. Presumably the footage wasn't usable from the BTS camera. 

Interestingly (to me, anyway) the Jax Slayher Hussiepass BTS  shows a long, long section between the end of the filmed fucking and the cumshot. In it, Jax is on his back (lazy bastard) with Xxlayna pulled tight to him, fucking her from below. The main camera isn't running - just the BTS camera, and it goes on, like that, her on top, him hugging her hard, for about ten minutes. The crew speak in low tones, and you can just hear one of them say something like 'You want me to get the fake cum?". They don't need it in the end, he's able to get off and give her a facial, but it's like he can't finish without doing this. Slightly weird and also, kinda hot. I didn't use that. But it was intriguing.

Xxlana has an OnlyFans - I joined it when I started to make this. She posts A LOT, every morning. She's really chatty and she makes a fair amount of semi-professionally filmed content as well as the usual selfies and short clips. As a veteran of many pornstar OnlyFans, she is the most prolific poster of non-PPV content I've seen. And she posts quite a bit of PPV content too.

So, strong recommend. She's perky, beautiful and fun, and if you've enjoyed this PMV she deserves your support.

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